A typical-sized pond is also viewable, although you must be up much closer to see the timid fish hiding under the pondweed. William I liked your descriptive words and the structure of your paragraphs. Now to the TV, it's too big! So, if you referred to your home as a retreat, you would be saying that your home is a peaceful place to escape from the world belong. I like my bedroom theme it fits my personality. My room has two windows, one facing south, the other west. I like the constant use of adjectives, it helps me visualise the colours. Your email address will not be published. But all of this mess isn't caused by me its made by my annoying, loud and messy sister (Well that's what I like to think) But I enjoyed reading this but you keep spelling "color" the wrong way it's "colour.". And for the final part of my bedroom the accessories. The colors that are used are light sea blue, grey and black. Because if you dont and try wade through all the clothes spread out and risk breaking your leg or ankle on toy cars or getting bits of lego stuck between your toes. e.g, the size of your bed, and the colours of your bed covers. I can count around 30 pieces of paper, old, stray certificates, none used or cared for. This crossword clue Metaphor for a messy room was discovered last seen in the April 25 2022 at the USA Today Crossword. And my tall and thin window opposite the door as you come in which is my main source of light in the day. Good work a nice peace of writing. A wooden bedside table [that I mention before.] They will use and expand upon it again and again within creative writing and narrative writing topics, and there are so many ways to get those creative juices flowing. R5. I like the feel, the carpet, my bed and the size of it. But there are some things that I would really like to change like my bed would be better if it was double size and maybe a little bit of colour on my walls would make it much better. Thirdly, the colors. By William Middleton. I loved the way you described your bedroom at the start, I had a good visualization of what your room looked like. I agree that it needs to be cleaner! I have my normal bag that I take to school everyday, my blue PE bag, my purple ski/sport bag and my old orange school bag. And now the style of my bedroom and what I love about it. These are 5 words you would use to describe my bedroom. The walls are boring light brown planks of wood. TROYS BEDROOM Near where this wall joins the feature wall there is another painting. Under my bed is my large curved desk that has been bolted to the ladder, and then my tiny wardrobe which I can barely fit all my clothes into. Compare your house to somewhere else where you also feel those feelings that you can feel every time you step in your front door whether its relaxation, comfort, escape, or even boredom! I like spending time in my room, because I like having my own space and its a good place to be by myself. It is a king single and it has a wooden front and back board. I have a single bed in the opposite corner of my room. Overall I love my room just the way it is. My walls are a light gray with light gray carpet but also my sheets on my bed are gray as well. It's the one spot in the house where it's completely designed by me. Brothers Of A Feather Driving Wheel Lyrics, Solfeggio 852 Hz, when you said mental trip you were bang on. Now, the layout. There are so many little pieces to remember that I dont even know nearly half of them even exist. So in conclusion my bedroom is the best in the house because it soft, layout just for me the colors just right and last of all it's the only place in the whole house where I can get some alone time and not be nagged! But the only bad thing about it is that I have to share it with my 3 year old brother Jackson. It has a nice texture and tickles my fingers when I wipe it. My Bedroom I would love to change my bed to a queen bed though. The next thing you eyes will find is my small black bedside table. Use used I little bit of complex vocabulary but not a lot. It was an excellent piece of writing. My bedroom (extended metaphor) My bedroom is a forest, heaps of clothes scattered on the floor is the undergroath. Quite a few good words but a lot of bland words in your writing making it a bit boring. Most of the punctuation was good but there were a few mistakes like writing the word twice. The furniture is a nice light brown. Secondly, the wall decorations. Very descriptive and easy to imagine your bedroom and feel how special it is to you. Below are 17 great examples to get your mind working. Beside the desk, in pride of place, is my single bed. Islas Bedroom Description Next time your could probably add some more descriptive words, not saying that there was not any but just add some more in like more bigger descriptive words. My king-single bed is placed directly in the middle of my room with my dresser, containing all of my clothes, on the left hand side. Next to my desk is a black and white Beanbag chair where I sit when Im either reading or watching Netflix. Really good, some really good descriptive words and I could imagine it really well. Other than for sleeping I use my bedroom to do my homework (at my desk), catch up with all the goss on social media and of course as a space to be alone for a little while. I have got posters on all the walls in my room and they almost cover up my well one of my walls. cock is life. Cleanliness, my room is not what you call clean my clothes from school lying on my bed jerseys not been hung up because I'm to lazy, my bed all messed up because I never make it, but some things aren't all bad like the way I have set up stuff that makes it look really cool and neat. cock is like. Describes it well. Well in my room I don't have that much furniture but I am going to tell you what I do have. September 2014. I have modern tropical theme with orange and blue striped sheets with a blue duva. The bright red walls grab you attention straight away. This is the place I go to when I have to go to bed or to just chill. My bed side table is black but my desk is wooden so is are my draws. There are books all over the place. The pencils are mostly sharp, pointy ready to be used. 4. Maybe next time don't use 'my' too much. I really liked that you had some really awesome words in your writing that really hooked me in and made it more intresting to keep on reading along. I have a cupboard kind of in the shape of some steps so that I can get up to my tall bed, I'm replacing this storage unit for some climbing holds. Well structured very big and descriptive paragraphs. The decoration part for my room. What I would really like though is some more storage because there is not a lot of space to put my belongings. 3+. Love reading your stories as always! Describe The Room Your In Describe the room you are in Dark, empty and cool; I gaze ahead at the room before me, with only the sound of the air conditioner thrumming. I walked through the door and stood still just looking into my bedroom. Im honestly surprised that its still hanging on to the wall and not falling, judging by all the weight its carrying. please help! what is commonly misdiagnosed as pink eye. I'm not saying my bedroom is small it's just not big enough for all my bits and bobs. Right in front of you as you walk in is my blue patterned desk with my small, white basketball hoop hanging above. I have recently changed around my room. So over all the 4 main things that i love about my room are style , layout ,accessories and furniture. My most favorite piece of furniture in my room is most definitely my bed because its where I spend most of my time and when you spend time with something like that for that long you're sure to end up getting attached to it, but anyway my bed is my favorite thing in my room because its warm when I want warm and cool when I want cool and plus its majorly comfy. I get a feeling you're into sports and really like cosy spaces. For self fun and study. I liked how you took the audience on a trip around your room. Troy you have used some good vocab. I have heaps of pictures in my room, on my wall I have a picture of a duck (which I took) and in my wardrobe there are pictures of my dog, family and friends. We have a old square tv holder thingy that I used to swing on until I put a hole in the wall, its still there. I feel happy and comfortable in my bedroom, I wouldnt change my room but I wouldnt mind a double bed though. They can cause any colored food or thing to show really easily. Wispy, rancid, airy, musty, stale, fresh, putrid, faint, light, floral, and acrid are all adjectives that could pertain to smell. But on the drawer top is a bit of mess, it holds my phone, a book, ipod and my lamp and behind my bed on my wall I have some posters. With its concrete floor and the temporary plywood walls. I also have a painting of Clifton Beach (where we lived in Australia) that I did with a friend, it is hanging over my bed. Good description Annie. Firstly the layout, my bedroom is the largest bedroom in the house and this means I have to share it with my younger sister. It also has a table which is made from birch. I wouldnt mind a bigger bed, though! I didn't find any spelling errors, but there was a mistake where there was no space between a full stop and the start of a sentence in paragraph 3. Great writing. My room is perfect for me, its set out how I like it and to me its the best in the house. Your description was great I really liked the way that you told the reader little extra things about the sub heading. Next to them I have tall, white draws bulging with clothes. From an outside point of view, it seems to be arranged in an orderly fashion. I would give you a rubric R4 mark. It has quite a bit of mess on top of the cabinet and next to the cabinet is white and black draws which holds my books and other things and above the drawers is a colorful kite. A metaphor for home explains your feelings about your home by using figurative language. Youd need to think of something your home reminds you of: a zoo, a swamp, a castle, or a zen retreat. Then, you can say your home is a zoo (or a swamp or a classroom, or whatever!) in order to create the perfect metaphor to describe your home. However your vocabulary could still improve to help the readers to have a clearer picture of what your bedroom looks like. Reading and studying books across the studying bench and on the side table. But I like it because I can change the room around to the way I like it. Your ideas are relevant Alex, you have described what it looks well. Jackson 2x4 Auto Darkening Lens, One area that you could work on is maybe not repeating things and making sure that what you say makes sense. I like it. It's a very accurate description and well written but the mess is very understated! Sometimes my siblings come into my room but they dont stay for long because they are too noisy so they get kicked out. One of the skateboards is a cruiser board (a small skateboard you cruise around on) I won at a competition, handmade by a local skateboard maker in Raglan. I think that your ideas are great, they describe your room well. So try using better descriptive words. It's a great description but like Alex said, you could give it more ideas and elaborate more on the topic to make it a better description. My favourite part of my room sitting next to the window is my single bed. Because most people feel most at ease at home, then you can make this comparison to show youre the opposite of them. The view of my room is amazing because when I look out of my window I see my whole farm I can see our cows I can see our cowshed and the sun rise. But Im lucky enough to have an en suite attached to my room! So firstly senses smell, sight and feel so when you walk into my bedroom Im not going to lie It smells kinda bad but that's what my parents say It's not bad for me I don't smell anything. But quite a fun place to fool around. Required fields are marked *. I also have two Japanese swords in my room and one of them are a full size katana and makes my room feel like i'm safe if anyone tries to break in. Cartoon drawings load the wall that I've drawn in my spare time, the weekends for a hobby. But there is always room for throwing down pillows as a carpet you will never know unless you try. My room does not have a lot of furniture in it but the favorite part of my room does and that is my desk it has two skinny shelves next to it. I give a 4. My bedroom is a very new addition to the world, like how its layout is not even final and having barely any furniture. Let me tell you about my favourite place to be AKA my bed. You have described it so accurately. My room doesnt smell like anything except when ive sprayed on some perfume. I have some great accessories in my room that can give you a story about my personality. My bedroom is the room straight ahead of the hallway it has the great things that most bedrooms have a theme, colors, bed and a carpet and those are the four topics I will tell you about. The next best thing about my bedroom is the accessories that make the room mine. The cloths on the large draws with the big mirror really need to be tidied up and put away properly then there is the pile of bags that have my ski gear and cricket bag the big bags could deffently be tidyed up and put in the garag. From my green reading lamp to my dart board, my patterned roman blinds and funky hooks on the wall. The bed is positioned next to a wall-sized sliding door. 4 out of 5. NSL: There were some comma's needed that were not there, and some starts of sentences that were not capitals. You could add more information on what each paragraph was. Brothers Of A Feather Driving Wheel Lyrics. You have described your room well and I can paint a picture. My parents make me keep it tidy for good habits. I like the layout, colors, furniture and the style it has a red feature wall (my favorite color). People say their home Now another thing about my room is that it is never clean well unless mum cleans it but there's always something on the ground like a lunch box or cloths mostly cloths. Old messy modern and not cared about is the first and foremost idea of the room. Sophies Bedroom Bent u genteresseerd neem gerust contact met ons op. Your next step is to use a wider range of vocabulary to more easily describe your room. A cool breeze drifts in from an open door or window. The room has a big space to go around in and has the hobbies I like.but best of all is to spend time with yourself and always relax after a long day. I think that you could work on adding a few more descriptive words. I don't care what people think about it because its my own space. You're spelling was really great, I don't think I found a single error. Room Metaphors and Similes. Your story was good. great work i love that you did good punctuation and it was a good story. Well in my bedroom I have blue and white walls. In my family you don't get much down time, from playing sport to hanging with friends, so it's good to do nothing. I love the way you have proven that your room is one of your favourite places. I could imagine looking at the things you described. There isn't really a theme to it. Just like a zoo, her home has a lot of little creatures (okay, humans) running around doing their own thing. In my room and on my bedside table there are books like The Hunger Games, Harry Potter and the Cursed Child, and a Top Gear magazine the Harry Potter book is yellowy orange with wooden woven ball with a child inside on the front cover, the Top Gear magazine has a red Aston Martin DB 12 with a caption saying Cruise Missile, on my desk there is a yellow Ferrari model which I got when I was born. My carpet is dark brown and I have no rugs or anything other than my carpet on the floor. Three quarters of my room is engulfed in clothes and mess. This makes our room one of the darkest rooms in our house. By my creamy white door there is a place where I hang up all my achievements such as medals, certificates and much more over top of that there is a glow in the dark poster I find that really youneek because it looks really cool when it's night. Sorry your room is so small! 5. as narrow as a hole. For example, the metaphor of an industrial factory is often used by biologists to communicate the complex process of a cell. When you walk in, on the left is a window and a desk, straight forward is a gigantic, wide window and to the right is my bed, wardrobe and heater. There are no dirty cloths on the floor, no rubbish on the floor. DVD, TV) and add comas in some places. Like I do my homework on my desk. They are stacked up quite messily. My bedroom is in the south end of the hose and it faces southwest. I think Hannah's story had lots of descriptive words and had good punctuation and spelling. All of my decorations are placed to make my room look even better. For example, a child who loves to be out playing on the streets but needs to be indoors by 5pm might come home and say: Its a prison in here! It has three drawers with coloured red, yellow and green and they hold some of my clothes. Across from that is an immense window, and finally, a built in wardrobe, containing various unfolded garments. Love the story love the writer the use of strong, adventurous adjectives eg horrifically untidy, musty, unfresh, and colour descriptions eg bright red, light, creamy, dark coloured are great. On the right hand side as you walk in there is an orange feature wall with a small white window towards the top. The storage is great because it is hidden away above my wardrobe, which is built into the wall, although most of my stuff goes under the bed. When I sit in bed with my eyes peeking out of my blanket it makes me wonder if something scary is hiding behind the box. Nevertheless your writing is lyrical, has rhythm and engages the reader. I'd like to see your room Alex because of the rustic theme and colours. You really made me think of what your room would've looked like with your little brothers toy box and with the bog window and the red wall. Sences in my bedroom are a fresh air smell, because the window is usually open in my room. The chook shed is made out of corrugated iron. Sometimes I come home and I see the floor for once because my Mum hates the mess I make in the room. They are rather a good set and they cost a lot of money. WILL HS BEDROOM I use my bedroom to sleep, relax and sometimes do my homework. The only way my room is brightened up is by having furniture with colour. The touch, it's soft, smooth and warm at night. Dotted around my room are a bunch of different things. My bed is really messy, it would be rare to see it made. 1. My king single bed is positioned against the wall with the big square window and next to that is a white bedside table filled with junk that hasnt been used in years! I move things around to make it look tidy. Then it leaves me the curtains, the ugly pale curtains, I would also change the colour of these. Really good, just a few punctuation mistakes. But over all, I like my room. The couch in the corner is also like a trunk that holds most my stuff. It has a great layout because of the way that my comfy double bed gets most of the sun.As you open the door to my bedroom a sudden warmth invites you in. But love your work. All my clothes and shoes are hidden away in the wardrobe so you dont have to see them. You described your bedroom well. The accessories on my wall is clean and probably not that safe to be under but i think that i could call it wall art. I peer out the window and see the light reflecting itself on the lake and the wind creating ripples in the water. How my bedroom looks? My bedside table is cream with a draw that is woven and basket like. My room is the smallest in the house but I love my room just the way it is. Mabelle your spelling is great there is no misspelling or any wrong words used. Clothes everywhere all over the floor and I have no way of knowing if they are clean or dirtyI certainly don't want to smell them! Jessie, I liked the length of the paragraphs and the descriptive words that you put in. Will someone help me solve the following problem. Its unique to me because its my room and I like it the way it is. My desk is white with a long blue draw that matches my blue wall. The biggest most horrifically untidy thing about my room is the floor. We're i can't use it when i'm in my bed! Maybe because it has two duvets on it and the sun is shining on it. It describes your room well. So overall i think my bedroom is a wonderful place to relax and do my own thing so I wouldn't change a thing about it. Outside if you are lucky you can hear the birds chirping because my mum throws bread outside for the them to eat in the winter months. But I don't even know why the window is there in the first place! George Wareing 8WH. The other side of the room has my single bed crammed in the corner by the door. Most of my accessories are very modern as same are made out of glass or clay. There are loads of different earrings dangling off of a metal sheet, which is shaped into a dog. as you described your room with a theme 'NBA' yes there are some elements of that but if you ask me, its not in plain sight! It has a very spacious drawer that pulls out from underneath. It was interesting to learn about some of her feelings about her private space. As you walk up the old skinny hallway, at the end, opposite the bathroom, you will find a bedroom,which you'd agreed looks like a bomb has gone off and spread all the junk everywhere, and yes its my bedroom, possibly the messiest in the house. In my room I also have a painting the my Aunty drew for me, It is a huge field of wheat with huts in them but no people from what you can see. The second style of my room is boys simply because its a boys only room for me and Jackson to share. I like how you have used lots of descriptive words. There is normally a lot of clothes spewing out of the the draws and onto the floor, it sortof looks like a waterfall if you are really imagine it, I find it frustrating when my Mum cleans it up because it is just going to get messy again. My accessories, make my room the way it is. Its a big room, but when shared and halved, the stomping grounds are rather small, which also means little mess in little space looks like big mess. My most special object in my room is my tiger picture above my bed. My wardrobe layout has all my shoes which i only have two pairs, hanging up are all my nice clothes. There are special items in my bedroom that cost a lot of money and one of those accessories are my Hats . So I would say that the overall style or theme of my bedroom is a rustic and tough style. The theme of my bedroom is black, white, blue and grey. This usually means that there is a mess all over the floor. After a long day, all i want to do is go up tom my cosy bedroom and either listen to some mellow music, or lie down, unwind and watch a bit of T.V or maybe even a relaxing film. Your full stops and capital letters are very good. I have loads of different accessories in my bedroom. On the top end there is two pillows and a bundle of pijamas. I am happy that I have a couch in my room it helps my back I dont know how but it does, sometimes it's easy to fall asleep on it after a long day of work. The layout of my medium-sized hideout is spacious, and being L shaped, it permits a reasonably large area to dance crazily around, spend quality time with friends or complete therapeutic craft activities. Jackson enjoys sharing a room with you. The style of my room is very rustic and original. Overall I like my bedroom and not to much needs changing. I like my bedroom just the way it is. I would say that the overall style of my bedroom is light and modern. The rooms style of the room is old rugged modern and not really cared about but that's what makes it mine. Good description Bree. Your punctuation was good. The theme of my room is simply Mine there are no requirements, no needs, nothing it is just whatever I make it to be. It is also nice to curl up with a book or bask in the afternoon sun. Nice work Kaia! The theme begins with a deep sea green feature wall on the right hand wall. I can imagine what your room would be like. I have separated the metaphors on this page into two lists. So I would like to describe to you my own little world. This seems to be a fair reflection of your bedroom. What storms then shook the ocean of my sleep. My bedroom is down the hallway on the right next to the big purple bathroom. Overall I like my room more than hate it, for it has my favorite things and it is where I spend the most time, because I sleep there. MY BEDROOM! Very descriptive though - well done! My bedroom I like it this way because it's bright and colourful. Also I have bad eyesight so It Is really hard to see my tv from my bed. I'm pleased you like your room Christopher. The clothes are untidy because they cant fit into each draw. Overall I think my room is an amazing space and deserves a lot more love and cleaning to keep it in peak condition. The sun shines in my room which makes my room warm up. This was well edited, but to get even better look over and over. There is a big black shoebox beside my bed which fits all my shoes in it. laptop cables are Get your answers by asking now. It also has jumps for my motorbike but you cant really see them because they are covered over with grass since I dont go on them much anymore. like how you have used brackets. You could add more information on the accessories in your room. I have a black carpet with a white lines diagonally going through it. In fact I love my bedroom it is the best. Now I will take your for a tour on what my bedroom looks like. Good work. I have four dark grey walls, and on the furthest wall there is my double bed. A few more sensory descriptions of your room maybe but we would happily rate you 4+. Overall I love my room to pieces because it belongs to me. Around the corner from my desk there is a window bay couch that is navy blue, across from the couch there is my Aqua chair covered in rugs and pillows. 3 of my walls are a plain white but the fourth one has wallpaper on it, the wall paper has a cream coloured background and has light pink coloured pineapples. Then, you were talking about how the home had turned into a place of work. I can imagine the messiness of your room and you used good punctuation and I like the Explanations. Stinky socks, crumpled papers and forgotten towels. Firstly Pokemon, I absolutely love Pokemon I have four plushies, dont judge me all right. Then to the right of my wardrobe is my tv cabinet which is a light brown wooden cabinet and it holds the usual tv, PS4 and XBOX 360 I have to balance on my chair and Sams shelf to reach my dictionary! The best bit about our carpet is it is always warm from under floor heating. My bed is the most comfortable and cosy thing in my whole entire room. It's good that he loves his room and his own space. The layout of my room is all over the place. State of my Bedroom.The state of my bedroom is well atrocious there's a mountain there and a another one over there. On the other side of the room is my chair with my blanket that fades from blue to white. make sure it's extra creamy!!! My carpet, I like my carpet Dont get me wrong I like the light creamy color that gets me comfy, I like the nice pillow feeling of it and how it eases me to sleep really quickly. My room to me is the most warmest place in house which makes my room cozy and casual. This is a good peace of writing. Use adjectives. Opposite the set of drawers is my build in wardrobe with my blue and red triangle patterned shelves.Also right in front of you as you walk in there is my big white window which is the main source of light. LOGANS BEDROOM It was great because I could visualise some things about what it would look like. You used capital letters in the right places and a few different types of punctuation. The first one is of peppers that I painted at Lauriston in year 4, that was the one that got ripped off the wall. Its lovely to see the colour of your carpet again, Just a wee reminder please unpack your rugby bag before it starts waffling out the door!! Ok I have got a lot of things in my room but some of my favorites are the accessories. With the windows closed it is a musty un-fresh smell and quite hot. Which one of them is a basketball poster and on that wall, I have a light to look over my cabinet in the corner of my room to brighten it up. This answers first letter of which starts with S and can be found at the end of Y. Alexs bedroom I go in, close my eyes, breathe deep, and the world goes away. On my blue wall there is a white butterfly that sits on a hook. The color of my wardrobe connected to my wall is black I would probably want to change the color to the same as the wall. Inspirational messages can be viewed on plaques, saying things such as dream, see beauty in everything, or friends are the family we choose for ourselves. The word believe is arched across the door to my wardrobe. Straight ahead there are windows facing east. Before long, the divide between work and home is blurred, and you can even metaphorically call your home a workplace because they appear so similar. Well I have a double bed that is really comfy and warm, a laundry basket that is full. the room was as fresh as morning air. I don't like the layout because my bed is on the other side of the room. The jewelry box once belonged my wonderful Mother. Im about to take you on a tour around my room. On the right hand wall you will see a dark sea green feature wall, the others a subtle black white. I have enjoyed reading this and laughed a few times at how accurate your description is. I have an adorable tiger painting above my bed. Your story was very descriptive and had good describing words. Even though my room hasnt got much in it, my room is the tidiest bedroom there. You also need to double check that your sentences making sense. I have boxes for my bits and bobs, they are blue, pink and purple. In my room I have lots of draws and places to put stuff but hardly use any of because most stuff is on the floor. I also have my Xbox which is of the things I play when Im not doing anything. It is dominated by rubbish, food plates, cups and dirty clothes. The bit that gets me, is how can one person be so messy?! My lamp is blue with a very bright light. My bedroom has been personalized specifically for me because of my homemade bed, my sky-light, the colours and the layout. NSL: be more bold with good words to catch the readers attention and to take them on a journey. My duchess is across from my bed flat against the left hand wall. I have a table in my room strewn with fly tying equipment and materials, it shows that I like fishing. I have to share my room with my big brother, Sam. Also another way to brighten the room would be to open the curtains. The wall opposite the door has three picture that me and my sisters had painted quite a while ago. My most special thing in my bedroom is my glowing dragon it isnt very big but it lights up at night time and gives a bright glow of rainbow colors. Next to that there is 2 shelfs about 1 meter long one is 30 centimeters higher than the other the bottom one is black and the top one is white and on top is legos that I built when I was young. I have white walls and chocolate brown curtains. You can imagine someone who has just installed a brand new security system might say: my home is a vault! In general, one might get the idea that metaphors are preferred to describe a bad user experience rather than a good one. The only thing thats in there is a couple of dresses I never wear and some picture frames that my mum forgot to take out when she moved rooms. It's the worst having such a messy bedroom. So now you know about my room, I hope you can visualize it and my topics were the furniture, accessories, colors and the layout. I liked the way that you used the senses to give a more detailed effect about your bedroom. In the summer it reaches a boiling point the duvets on the bed gets thinner and thinner and it gets harder to catch some sleep. The accessories are the things I think help make my room unique. Everyone wants to have the perfect bedroom, the best way to do that is to make it your own. 8. as rough as a cob. Now I have my wardrobe at the foot of my bed because it makes it very easy to access when I wake up every excruciating morning. I like her use of descriptive words and the slight humour. R4. The accessories. Your punctuation is really good, but you are missing a few commas and had some capital letters missing. Also my bed is a queen which is always made with colorful sheets on It. 4. In my room I have a new wooden drawers and white shelves beside. My room is a square room and is medium sized, I am lucky enough that I have it all to myself. Good job! When you say your home is a swamp, you usually mean that its messy, dark, and maybe even a little smelly. Your writing was exactly as I remember it. My pillow is softer than a cloud and feels like a giant marshmallow. Well structured paragraphs and a few funny jokes too. In this classic line from Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet, Romeo spots a light coming from Juliets bedroom, causing him to compare Juliet to a sunrise an image that evokes a sense of wonder, hope, and happiness. It is the largest bedroom in the house it is rectangular and has a built in wardrobe. Try next time to make some of your objects more descriptive and not just the colours. You did'n't go into detail about your furniture we don't know what patterns or colours they are. My bedroom layout includes two sets of windows, both made with with grey aluminium and double glazed glass. Lots of mess, piles and piles. As I wade through the swamp of clutter I find things I lost from months ago. I like my room because of the rugged and unique feel it gives off and all the furniture and accessories. Skateboards are propped up against the plain back wall next to my bed. My bedroom is in the middle of two other bedrooms. It is made of pine so is a rather light golden brown in colour. My bedroom is exactly the way I like it and can tell you a story about my personality, if you read on you will know about my personality and go for a virtual journey through my bedroom. And the last of my accessories is the bulletin board. Sometimes a little bit of exaggeration creates the best metaphors. As I creep through the messiness there begins a pile of lego pieces on the grey dull carpet waiting for someone to stand on it and be be pricked. I would give you a 3. Cleanliness is key for a happy mum. My room has lots of colour in it. I'm serious it's a mess (I cleaned it yesterday) with clothes and toys all over the place. Feed-forward - You had nouns but boring adjectives 'A computer that is big and fun' add more description to it 'Speakers that are loud' it's too boring be more interesting. There are plenty of possible metaphors for home. The trees blowing in the evening breeze shake leaves slowly onto the lake, delicately touching the water. Here, theyre using comparison (that a vault is hard to get into, just like the home), but instead of saying like a vault, theyre saying is a vault, for literary effect. Another piece of furniture I haven't yet mentioned is my bookshelf. I have a lot of special objects in my bedroom. I think you need to work on use of commas and apostrophes, some of them are not needed. Or, it is a metaphor that could be used if you have just cooked a big messy meal and turned around to see that there is flour and vegetable scraps and plates and bowls all over the counter. What a great description of your beautiful bedroom! Moving on from the layout of my bedroom to the layout of my walls. The style of my bedroom is a wooden, boys and football styled room. Some names needed capitals. You could improve on adding more ideas and making them a bit more interesting. 5. My bedroom. The double bed is messey and not the new. The paddock sometimes has sheep in it. Soft grey carpet pushing through my feet. I suck creamy cock. Idioms and Metaphors about Having a Good Sleep 8. Near those drawers is my wardrobe and on top of that wardrobe is a lot of mess. The best metaphors come from the heart. Mabelles Bedroom Description I didn't see any spelling mistakes. But one particular sport the theme is based on is Basketball. There's pictures everywhere, bright jewelry, and so many perfumes on my duchess. 3-. The set up in my room. Next time you can probably calm down by using the brackets. Descriptive writing is one of the essential skills that children will learn in school and progress into life. My walls are light blue and my ceiling is white. It is the most modern part of my entire house because it has recently been renovated from the garage that was never used. It sounds like the perfect place to go after school or work and feel comfortable and relaxed. Save my name, email, and website in this browser for the next time I comment. When you walk in my room you will see a white door and when you walk in the main area all the walls are white with dark furniture. Well done, I can tell you put a lot of effort into it. In my bedroom I have a big abstract photo of mountains hanging above my head. Everyday Life Metaphors. I like how you used a lot of description! You described your bedroom very well, but I feel your punctuation let you down a bit. My curtains are white with a see through sort of material over top. My walls are blue on the bottom with white as the top of the wall and for the roof. Roman blinds with large, bold coloured birds of many forms. No need to be fancy, just an overview. Antenna Tv Buffalo, In my room you would hear gunshots roaring from my TV. Next step is to read it over to correct punctuation like needed and unneeded capitals and use of commas. The colors of my room are dark and a little bit of white. It has creamy vanilla wallpaper with 2 rose red chandeliers that hang of the corners of my room. My bedroom supplies a marvellous view. I have a foam pillow, so my head just sinks in. The last thing in my room is my bed. I like how I am able to visualize your bedroom. I dont know if food plates count as accessories because if they do i have a lot of accessories. Lastly is the layout. I like the clear description, so it's easy to visualise. Secondly are my accessories I have many accessories in my room but there is three that stand out to me my PS4, tv and Headset. The rest of the walls are a nice white color and it goes with the furniture that is against it. There is a bold yellow pikachu stuffed toy next to my pillows and an All Blacks blanket covers the rest of my bed and you can see the light blue sheets peeking out of the head end of my bed. I have massive two windows that take up almost all of the wall. Great writing. It used to be a spare room and I moved into it a couple of years ago. You have missed out on some things ie. In my room there are lots of clothes and stuff on the floor my room is very messy, and it is hard to get around without stepping on something if I want to do something in it I have to clean it, also on hot days it can be very hot and sometimes it can be really cold when it is rainy and windy. Overall I think my bedroom is nice and comfy, and I like it the way it is. I believe this because my bright orange feature wall attracts the daylight sun and all of the furniture is either new or has had a splash of paint to make it look fresh. Does my room have a theme? Its a good description of your room but could be a little bit better because of the spelling grammer. Jamies Bedroom Description. I deposit myself there to snuggle up with a book, stroke my darling cat or simply sit on my bed, daydreaming, soaking up the sacred silence. So overall your writing is amazing. Lots of vivid detail and descriptions Piper! However you could of used more of it like putting commas in longer sentences. It holds over 40 books as well as countless keepsakes, wires and old toys. My bedroom is special to me because it's where I can go to get alone time and just relax it's pretty smelly but it's a cozy warm layout that is just for me. JESS'S BEDROOM DESCRIPTION Above my bed are decorations and then across from my bed there is my creamy white set of draws. You used the write amount of good words in the right places. I have a blue stegosaurus lampshade, a monitor and PS4, a TV and even a bulletin board. I think Bridget's description of her room is fairly accurate. Very good description i could imagine i'm there.Very good punctuation. When you look in my room you will see that it is kind of a square shape with green and graffiti wallpaper. On the left hand side is a bunk bed which has Jacksons (my little brother) bed at the bottom and my bed at the top with really messy covers. It had a lot of descriptive words in it. I have two soft pillows filled with feathers and two cotton filled ones. My bedroom is somewhere that I regularly spend time. JESSIES BEDROOM. Georges Bedroom The ideas are great and relevant to the topic. As you walk into my room there are many things you may notice first. Im looking at my animal pillows and paying attention to the detail, their touch is soft like a piece of silk and the zip that's holding the stuffing in the zip is sharp and has a cold feeling. The brown carpet matches the old wooden skirting. I did the wrong thing. In my room I have my school bags. The layout of my room is your everyday large square room allowing a big area to dot items around, such as a bright white, built in wardrobe, a comforting king single or the small baby blue couch. Just remember we are moving your room soon. Another factor of how my room can look so messy is because of the creamy white colored walls! There is a big space in the middle of the room because of the positioning of the furniture. The layout is sort of a P shape without the hole. You have elaborated on your ideas and have given the reader evidence why it is like that. The punctuation is almost flawless, as far as I can see. You may find me laying there reading a book in the natural light coming through my window, which is my main source of light. This is why my bedroom is the best place in the house. Now I am going to move on to my senses. Around the neck itself I keep my karate belts, white, orange, yellow and purple. A metaphor is a word or phrase that is used to make a comparison between two things. your story of your bed room is really good i like your volcabarere in it i really liked your story next time you could work on double check your work for spelling errors well done, I really like this Connor! I am going to take you on a mental journey around my bedroom. First I will explain senses then accessories and then layout and then to top it off the color of my bedroom, it is great. The only messy things in my room is my carpet. But most of the time, me and Sam are in different moods. I would like to get a bit of colour into my room because at the moment it is pretty plain. The style of my room is a beach theme. Shoes and clothes that I was too lazy to put back in draws in a bunch on the floor in front of it. Even though it's small and crammed together and not that tidy it all adds to the style and the feel of the room. All together I love my room because it is how I want it, its layout is how i want it, its smells okay,the accessories are good, and the theme is perfect. Yes it definately is the best bedroom in the house and yes we are all jealous!!!! Over by the side of the wall is my birth certificate that is framed and it tells me the meaning of my name where it originated from and a paragraph about who I am and stuff about me. I stroll into my room and the bright colours instantly pop out. On one side is a three section wardrobe with most of my craft supplies in it. The style of your room to me is a dark and bright theme with all the colours and design. Its nice to get up to something like that. Floor, Where is it?, Under the bed, in my wardrobe. Probably you will see my bed first it's right under my window right in the center in my room. Under the small window is my bed and to the left of the bed is my small bedside table with my grey shaded lamp on top. Definitely need to work on your vocabulary and sentences as it seems to be repetitive. My desk is probably the messiest part of my room because of the way that all my notebooks, pens, pencils and pencil cases are sprawled on it. I love this painting because of the colours and the way the artist has paid attention to detail. The sight can be sometimes messy, with my clothes everywhere. The mirror in my room is attached to my sister's dresser, around the edges of it has stickers that are half pulled off. I have a wooden modern looking bed side table where I put my trophies and books. I have many wall decorations in my room ranging from many colours such as black, red, white, green, blue, pink and yellow. Flick Of The Wrist Meaning, Your email address will not be published. Personally Im happy with my bedroom, the only problem is that it isnt done. 6. as noisy as the market. So my layout might be tight, but it works for me. If you open the window the fresh air wafts in. My bedroom is down the small hallway and to the right. They are very basic paragraphs but with good description in them. The ceilings are high and have a wooden trim around the perimeter of the room. Other times it is messy even though we tidied it that morning. I want to be out playing with my friends.. When you look around my room you can see a whole bunch of different things, if you climb above all the dirty clothes, theres all of my furniture, my radiator and a whole load of colours. Some of its correct. I am going to take you on a virtual trip around my room. But the floor is not the messy thing in my room my wardrobe is, my wardrobe is where all the dirty clothes are that I can't be bothered to put away, when I have to tidy my room so I just put them in my wardrobe. My duvet is new as I got it when we moved house. Running down the old wooden corridor a floorboard squeaked underneath my pounding feet. The furniture in my room is quite tight. The Mess, it's the first thing you see when you walk in, it's everywhere you pretty much have to swim through it all just to get to my bed because it's all covered in clothes that I've worn for the past week and can't be bothered walking the 20 meters to put them in the wash. My mum yells at me all the time to give it a clean but I just about always manage to find an excuse to not clean it up. I enjoyed reading your writing illustrates without hesitation what your room feels and looks like. They are also a good way to annoy everyone in the house and wake them up when I want to. I really like the words you have used to describe your story like My room is average but not like an average kids bedroom, my room is very organised where all my clothes go. My accessories, however arent as basic as my furniture, but rather the opposite. so I was a bit confused. The untidiness of my bed is also horrific, just a pile of blankets, sheets and a duvet all scrunched up in the middle of the bed. I have been in your room but I think you have to clean your room before a gest gets there a ha ha 4. I am lucky as the sunlight peeks over the fence and smothers my walls with a bright, warm glow. To the right of my bed is my set of wood stained brown patterned drawers with my guitar up against them. It is a large room that comes out of the side but barely gets any sunlight and heat. So in conclusion I think my bedroom has a good layout, colors, furniture and style and I like it a lot and so does Jackson. The laws don't apply to my imagination except for the time to clean your room law. Inside it there are many of my favourite pieces of jewelry including both Greenstone and Sterling Silver necklaces. The other pieces of furniture in my room is my desk where I do most of my drawings and homework and then there is my bedside table, my bedside table is made of pine wood which has been varnished brown, on the table the is a picture of my granddad standing in front of a old war plane and old school class from the UK at the back of my bedside table there is my thermobug which I made in year 7. But your NSL would be to use a larger range of different words as you have repeated some of the good words. I ventured into my room, with the sunshine streaming in. My clothes they are placed in piles beside the wall because my dad has not got any draws for the room. I love the colour scheme in my bedroom as turquoise blue is one of favourite colours. There is a slight problem with my room. Your next step is to improve your grammar and punctuation. Chris Trousdale Cause Of Death, Consider the classic sayings "love is blind" and "patience is a virtue." 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